Hello readers. As you may know, I've been writing a screenplay. Well, I'm putting a piece of it on here because I am nowhere near this scene and I'd like to seriously put it down on paper before I lose it. I decided I'd share it with the world, and maybe get some feedback.
To set up the scene: Kyle, our protagonist, has recently been released from a 9 month stay in a mental hospital after attempting to kill himself. His family died in a tragic accident, and in the wake his friends left him- including his girlfriend of two years named Angie. He decides that he misses her, and is going to get her back no matter the fight. Not wanting to do it alone, he asks his friend Shawn to tag along but to stay in the car. Enjoy and please leave your thoughts. As a work in progress I love to hear people's thoughts for improvement.
EXT. ANGIE'S HOUSE
KYLE walks up to the door and rings the doorbell. ANGIE opens the door in awe.
ANGIE
Kyle? What are you-
KYLE
Can we talk? Inside?
ANGIE
Um...sure.
Cut to: Shawn's profile in the car watching as the two enter the house. He sighs deeply and shakes his head.
Angie and Kyle walk into the living room, and Angie takes a seat.
ANGIE
You look like you're doing well.
KYLE
Please don't try to be nice. I won't be long.
ANGIE
OK. That's fine.
KYLE
I've been missing you, and by now you probably know that. I got out of that mental hospital and you were still the first thing on my mind. And it kills me because you left me when you shouldn't have. My family dies and you call me selfish, even though the whole time I was making sure you were OK.
ANGIE
Kyle I'm-
KYLE
I'm not done. (pause) But I forgave you for all of that. As I sat in that mental institution, away from my friends. Away from everyone I cared because they fucking left me. And I thought this whole time you and me were something because you said we were.
ANGIE
We were-
KYLE
(Angry) Don't lie to me. We may not have always been the best, but half the time you wouldn't even listen to me. And when I needed you the most, you left me because you couldn't take it? You blocked me on Facebook and changed your phone number?
ANGIE
Did you just come here to bitch at me?
KYLE
No. I came here to get you back. But now that I'm here standing in front of you, about to tell you that I love you and care about you more than anything else in this world. I realize I already told you that and you called me an idiot. You said I was dumb for caring that much about you. (long pause). Well congrats. You fucked up big time.
ANGIE
It wasn't what you think it was, Kyle. I didn't want to leave you. I never wanted to leave you. You were the only guy who I've felt this comfortable around. But I was really stressed out from school. And my mom...she's never liked you. She thought you weren't good enough for me.
KYLE
Did you think I was good enough for you?
ANGIE
crying Yes. I loved you. (long pause)
KYLE
You know there's a saying everyone is familiar with. “If you love somebody let them go.” But they don't ever know the whole quote. “If you love somebody let them go. If they return they were always yours. If not, they never were.” Well here I am returning. I'll forever be yours. It's just a shame you'll never be mine again.
ANGIE
(crying) I'm sorry, Kyle.
KYLE
I am too. Goodbye Angie.
Cut to: EXT HOUSE.
Kyle walks out of the front door and gets into the car with Shawn.
SHAWN
Everything OK, buddy?
KYLE
No.
SHAWN
You want me to drive?
Kyle shakes his head yes and they get out to change seats. Fade to black.
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